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With deforestation, urban development and illegal hunting, many animal species are becoming endangered as they lose their habitat and some are even threanted to the point of extenction. Do you think it is important to protect animals? What measures can be taken to deal with the problem.

#deforestation #development #species #habitat #point #extenction #animals #measures
It is undeniable that with
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environmental manipulation
such
 as unlawful poaching, cutting trees and other activities for the aim of humans' comforts most
animals
 and
plants
 would stay on the verge of extinction. From my
points
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 of view, it is
crucial
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a crucial
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 fact that
this
 problem should be taken seriously. In
this
 essay I intend to delve into the problem and suggest some
solution
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.
To begin
 with,
Animals
 and
plants
 involve important parts of human life which means that they
being
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guarantee mankind being.
They
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 life
are
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 a chain and
they
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their
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 existence can balance the ecosystem.
For instance
,
extinction
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 of
kind
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 of mouth can distribute to the over-populated
some
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species
while
 it would lead to the vanishing
species
 of
animals
 which
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from
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on
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 them because lack of food
source
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sources
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.
In addition
, nowadays most
use
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 of
animals
 and
plants
 are in the medical field. most cures
prescribing
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 by doctors are containing
material
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materials
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 that have been taken from
animals
 or specific
plants
 gens that they can affect directly
on
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humans The solutions are not easy but joint efforts by
government
 and
individual
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individuals
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 can lessen the gravity of the situation. At
individual
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the individual
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level
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 people should obey the rules which have been legislated by
government
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the government
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 in order to conserve these
species
 from
endanger
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endangering
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such
 as restriction of hunting in specific areas.
furthermore
,
Government
 should plan for organizing some endangered
species
 and allocate them
budget
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a budget
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 in order to handle them with care and provide them
proper
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the proper
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 quality of life
such
 as
keeping
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by keeping
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 them in
national
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a national
the national
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park
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parks
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 or assigning some restricted areas where no poachers cannot go there.
To sum up
, I reiterate that
animals
 and
plants
 are crucial for
humans'
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humans
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 being and their extinction can
leads
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 to irrecoverable
damages
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damage
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 on
earth
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. The alleviation will reach from shared responsibility of folks and
government
.
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