The 3 graphs below describe the changes in yearly expenses by local authorities in Someland over a period of 20 years.

The 3 graphs below describe the changes in yearly expenses by local authorities in Someland over a period of 20 years.
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The three pie graphs provide information on the annual expenses of various sectors in a certain country over the 20-
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period.
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, the state has spent most of the budget towards Higher education for the past two decades,
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a certain portion is almost evenly distributed between K-12 education, Transporation, and health and human resources. From the
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1980 to 2000, almost half of the nation's funds were allocated to the education system, which ranged from 35% to 45%, respectively. It is
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important to point out that environmental services and other expenditures stood at just under 9% over the period of time.
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, the margin allocated for K-12 decreased in those consecutive years. Wherein, it started from 25% and gradually reduced to 18%. Meanwhile, health and human resources increased in the
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1990
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were cut down to half the following
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.
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, Transportation started from 16% in the first
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and ended up being the second highest expense the country had in the
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2000.
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