If old people are no longer physically, mentally or financially able to look after themselves, younger family members should be legally responsible for supporting them. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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debate that whether
parents
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aging
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the onus is on
children
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law enforcement or not. from my point of view, I
filrmly
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firmly
disagree with the given notion and some arguments surround my notion.
this
would be
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if we
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them to support their
parents
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it is more
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responsibility.
to begin
with,
parents
are god's gifts and they are the only people in the world that never can be replaced. they have nurtured their
children
with lots of barriers.
Therefore
, now it is the
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turn to aid them in their calamities.
However
, it is their human
responsiblity
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responsibility
to amend their
parents
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generous
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and should not be their legal
liablity
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liability
.
for instance
, they may have some problems in their personal life
such
as
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of time or conflicts with their family members. if
this
obligation
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to their duty that would heavier the burden
of
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their shoulder which can be unfair in some cases.
furthuremore
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Furthermore
, they have to dedicate their life to
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around them and
as a
result
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they can not live properly. that could cause some mental issues and pschycos'
diseas
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disease
diseases
such
as depression and isolation .
moreover
,
children
should be responsible for their own life. they have the right
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marriage and
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birth to their child. So, they should
priortize
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prioritise
their own child.
for example
, people who take many times for their
parents
to take care of them should expect
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up infants without having knowledge of
ettiquets
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etiquettes
etiquette
.
to sum up
,
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reiterate that infants should take care of their
parents
because of their high value
however
, it should not be an enforcement for them.
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