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In the past, most people lived in small villages , where everyone knew everyone else. Nowadays, most people live in large cities where they only know a few people in their area. What do you think were the advantages and disadvantages of living in a small community?

#people #villages #cities #area #community
Many years ago, a
lot
 of
people
 lived in small
villages
 where they recognized everyone and they
familiar
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 to everyone.These days,
a
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plenty of
people
 living in big cities where
a
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few
people
familiar
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to
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they
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. First of all, there are
a
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plenty of
advantage
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of
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 living in
a small
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a small village
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villages
.
For instance
,because of agriculture,
people
 will be
health
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.So,they do a
lot
 of effort
for
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 evolve their products of agriculture.
Also
,there are plenty of plants
grow
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 there.These plants produce many oxygen.So,there
are
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 not any pollution of air.
Secondly
,the inhabitants of a small community
is
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 accommodating, generous,welcoming and loving with each other.When you need something or you have any problem, they help you right away.
Thirdly
, the residence of these places is wide
although
 the village is small. You will travel and live with freedom.
Moreover
,there are
disadvantage
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 sides of living there.
For example
, there are the industry systems
are
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few
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.So, in
this
 place, the development is lower.
Also
, the workplace is not enough for
people
.
Thus
,there are a
lot
 of
people
 without
job
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.
To conclude
,living in a small community has a
lot
 of diverse sides.But of course, I think small
villages
 are comfortable for everyone.
This
useful
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 not only for us , but
also
 our members of
family
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the family
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.Because
,
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the
people
 living
in
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there will be a few ill than
people
 in the large city.In my opinion,living in
a small
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a small village
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villages
 is better than the other cities.
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  • Bond
  • Close-knit
  • Tight-knit
  • Belonging
  • Familiarity
  • Security
  • Support system
  • Social connections
  • Look out for
  • Have someone's back
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