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The chart shows British emigration to selected destinations between 2004 and 2007.

The chart shows British emigration to selected destinations between 2004 and 2007.
#british #emigration #destinations
The bar chart below compares 5 destinations
where
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were
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 chosen by
British
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the British
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 for emigration
during
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from
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 2004 to 2007. the first option of emigration was Australia for
British
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the British
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.
in
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 2006
had
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apply
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the most
number
 of
people
decided
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todecided
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 go there with 51
thousands
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thousand
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 of
people
.
However
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,However
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this
number
 slightly decreased to 24
thousands
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thousand
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 in
following
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the following
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 year.
spain
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Spain
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 ranked
second
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as second
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 country of migrant destination. the
number
 of
people
went
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who went
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 there was almost the same in 2004 and 2005 with 35
thousand
while
this
 figure moderately declined in 2006 and reached
throught
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through
 the 27
thousand
 in 2007
USA
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The USA
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 had the least emigrant from
british
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British
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 and most of them
were
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was
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 in 2004 and 2006 with 24
thousand
 and the fewer was in 2005 with under
than
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apply
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19
thousand
of
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apply
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people
. France
flactuated
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fluctuated
fluctuate
 through the years
however
 in 2005 it could reach the most emigrant from Britain with 34
thousand
.
overall
, Australia had the highest
number
 of
emigration
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emigrants
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 and
USA
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the USA
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 was the least
favorable
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favourable
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 destination for Britain
people
.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, people, thousand with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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