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Compare the advantages and disadvantages of three of the following as media for communicating information. State which three you consider the most effective.

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It is undeniable  that information technology and tools have been becoming our basic necessities in our daily life today. Nowadays, we get information through various
media
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such
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Internet
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the Internet
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, radio,
television
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,
books
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, etc and they
also
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 have a great impact on our
lives
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. Despite the existence of all these types of
communications
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communication
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. I believe that the most effective are
television
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, 
books
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 and
films
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.
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, it is argued that
books
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 are the main source of knowledge and are the best method individuals can take if they want to learn about history, sciences or
variety
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a variety
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things
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of things
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. From a very ancient period till now,
books
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 have been working as the
light house
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lighthouse
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 for our society.
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,
books
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 are very beneficial for
youngstars
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youngsters
young stars
. Fictions not only improve our knowledge or skill
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 but
also
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, increase our thinking ability. It opens new horizons in front of us.
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, the major
demirts
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demerits
 of
books
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 is that in the current era, youth prefer visual sources over reading.
On the other hand
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, all are not
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 to read
books
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. They expect something easier and more appealing
them
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to them
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.
Television
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 is another powerful
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media
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medium
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. Watching
television
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 has played
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such
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a significant role in our daily routine. Today's youth likes
media
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 like music, radio, movies and etc. One of the main is that most of the
people
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 who have a TV set, watch programs news and with watch attention. It is
convenient
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a convenient
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 tool for the agency and all
people
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.
However
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,
this
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 medium has a number of drawbacks and bad impacts. Agency and
politically
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political
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 organizations frequently send negative and inaccurate news.
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,
this
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media
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 has a great serious effect on
human's
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human
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 health. Alternatively,
films
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 can be adapted from
books
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 and effectively shorten the  time required to grasp the whole idea. Alternatively,
films
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 can be adapted from
books
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 and effectively shorten the  time required to grasp the whole idea.
Such
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 as
,
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 Movies can be even more impressive than
books
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 as they present details in a vivid form. Apart from that, in the cinema, many
films
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 have a bad
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in
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on
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people
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’s
lives
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, It encourages them to commit various acts of violence or crime and brings negative situations into their
lives
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.
People
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 acquire good and bad qualities through movies. In conclusion, I would like to state that
books
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, televisions and
films
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 are the most powerful and effective
medias
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media
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 for communicating information. These
media
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 have a positive impact on
people
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's
lives
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 and provide basic necessities.

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