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Writing Samples
Band 6.5

You recently purchased a product that turned out to be faulty. Write a letter to the store manager, complaining about the issue and requesting a replacement or refund.

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Dear Sir, I am writing
this
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 letter regarding the
product
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 I recently purchased from your shop. It seems that it is not working properly. Let me explain in detail, what the issue is! The
product
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 name is "Mixer Grinder" of L.G Company.It is in white colour. I bought it on
22nd
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the 22nd
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 of December and today is
25th
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the 25th
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December
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of December
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. When I tried it for the first time, it worked perfectly but
then
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, the next day it stopped working and I do not know what is the matter. My husband
also
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 checked it twice, but it did not work. I would like you to check with the
product
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. I will get the
product
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 to your store. Please check it, if anything is wrong and if it does not work, I would like you to replace the
product
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 or refund the amount.
It's
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 price is 18,000rs. I hope you will look into the problem. Yours Sincerely, Sneha

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Coherence and Cohesion
Your letter is generally well-organized and easy to follow. However, ensure each paragraph has a clear focus and transitions smoothly into the next to enhance cohesion.
Task Achievement
You've successfully communicated the issue and your request for a resolution, which is great. To further improve your task response, you might consider adding details about any attempts to resolve the issue yourself (beyond checking the product), which can make your case stronger and show a proactive approach.
Writing Tone
You've maintained a polite and respectful tone throughout the letter, which is suitable for the context.
Logical Structure
The structure of your letter, including the greeting, detailed explanation, and closing, is effectively executed.
Complete Response
Your clear statement of the problem and explicit request for a specific resolution (replacement or refund) directly addresses the task's requirements.
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