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Some people think that governments should give financial support to creative artists such as painters and musicians. Others believe that creative artists should be funded by alternative sources. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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There has been a heated topic of debate as to whether creative artists should be funded by the
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government
 or
it
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should come from other sources.
While
i
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 admit that
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government
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goverment
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government
 should support
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artists,
i
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also
 believe that
money
 for
art
projects
 should come from alternative sources  Undeniably, some works of
art
definately
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definitely
 require
goverment
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government
 financial help. Some
art
projects
 in public places
such
 as streets or shopping
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 can increase the beauty of
this
 city. These
projects
 represent the culture and history through the details on it.
Therefore
,
this
 city can not produce
this
 kind of
art
 if the
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government
do
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 not
fund
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.
Moreover
,
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government's
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goverment's
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government's
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investment
invesment
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investment
 in
art
projects
 can
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attract
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attract
 attention from
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 and
certainly
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 it will make a lucrative for
this
 country
However
,
i
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 believe
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that
 state funding should
be spend
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 on more essential concerns. The
goverment's
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government's
 budget has to distribute to many different fields
such
 as education, healthcare and so on.
Hence
, it will become a kind of waste by spending
money
 unreasonably on some
art
projects
.
Beside
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, the artist
do
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 not have to based on
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the goverment
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goverment
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government
 to have
money
 because they can make it for themselves. Most
musician
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musicians
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 and painters make a living by performing or selling their
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artistic
artisitic
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artistic
 creations to fans or collectors or they can even open
exhibition
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 to receive
money
 from
art
 lovers in
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order
oder
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order
 not to get any help from
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government
goverment
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government
 In conclusion, there are plenty of reasons why
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government
governments
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goverment
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government
 should give financial support to creative artists, but in my
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opinion
oppinion
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opinion
 artist should rely on available alternative
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