Some people think that governments should give financial support to creative artists such as painters and musicians. Others believe that creative artists should be funded by alternative sources. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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There has been a heated topic of debate as to whether creative artists should be funded by the
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government
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should come from other sources.
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admit that
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government
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should support
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artists,
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also
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believe that
money
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for
art
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projects
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should come from alternative sources  Undeniably, some works of
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definately
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definitely
require
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financial help. Some
art
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projects
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in public places
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as streets or shopping
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can increase the beauty of
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city. These
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represent the culture and history through the details on it.
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,
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city can not produce
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kind of
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if the
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do
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not
fund
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.
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,
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government's
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goverment's
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government's
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investment
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investment
in
art
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projects
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can
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attract
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attract
attention from
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and
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it will make a lucrative for
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country
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,
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believe
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that
state funding should
be spend
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on more essential concerns. The
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goverment's
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budget has to distribute to many different fields
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as education, healthcare and so on.
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, it will become a kind of waste by spending
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unreasonably on some
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projects
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.
Beside
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, the artist
do
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not have to based on
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the goverment
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goverment
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government
to have
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because they can make it for themselves. Most
musician
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musicians
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and painters make a living by performing or selling their
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artistic
artisitic
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artistic
creations to fans or collectors or they can even open
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exhibitions
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to receive
money
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from
art
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lovers in
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order
oder
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order
not to get any help from
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government
goverment
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government
In conclusion, there are plenty of reasons why
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government
governments
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goverment
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government
should give financial support to creative artists, but in my
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opinion
oppinion
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opinion
artist should rely on available alternative
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