Government should spend money on railways rather than roads.

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modern times,
government
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always improve many facilities for their inhabitants to live their life
more
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easier including providing
a roads
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to serve the needs of the people. Some argue that they should spend
money
on
railway
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instead
of roads. In the following
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both of these views will be discussed. On the one hand,
railway
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provides various
advantage
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to the inhabitants.
Firstly
, it
make
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more
uses
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of the area in the air to be more benefits rather than a normal road on the ground.
Secondly
, it gives the user an option to choose a faster way if they are in a hurry situation.
Moreover
,
Railway
does help reduce The traffic
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caused by the limited space of transportation.
Thirdly
,
due to
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global warming
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by the pollution that came from
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vehicles. Railways can provide an alternative way for people who do not want to cause any pollution to the earth.
On the other hand
,
to build
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a
railway
requires loads of
money
from the government budget. It may be better to use
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money
on
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and priority matters
such
as
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it on
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hospital facilities. In
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, I personally think that
although
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requires a lot of
money
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. Not
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provides
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to the habitants but
also
help
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reducing
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pollution at the same time.
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  • sustainability
  • environmental footprint
  • efficiency
  • pollution
  • cost-effectiveness
  • economic development
  • accessibility
  • public transportation
  • congestion
  • air pollution
  • initial investment
  • maintenance
  • upgrades
  • rural
  • urban
  • last-mile connectivity
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