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Some people believe that after the child begins his/her schooling their teachers will have more influence than their parents. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In the early years, kids are influenced by different kinds of people. It is being said that
school
teachers
 have more impact on infants than their own relatives. In
this
 essay, I will discuss how children see
teachers
 as better models to follow and
then
 give my opinion. Some
teachers
 project unique personalities kids feel attracted to follow. As
students
 can see
teachers
 from different subjects, they
also
 perceive how they behave and perform at work. Being on time, organized, trustworthy and clever are some aspects that may cause admiration and make
students
 repeat them.
For instance
, I chose my field of study based on the experience I had with my favourite
teacher
 at
school
 social science. She had a high intellect. She was kind, generous and strict at the same time. She made me feel comfortable with social studies topics. Most educators who are dynamic and teach in a creative way are more likely to be
students
' role models. Since
students
 are curious and unconsciously willing to learn, having a
teacher
 who uses different tools to make classes more joyful and active develops behaviour patterns taught in class.
For example
,
according to
 the BBC a study done in the USA showed that a high percentage of
students
 from high
school
 have changed their lives for the better after having one on one personal talks with their high
school
teachers
.
To sum up
, instructors have different features in their personalities that
students
 may want to copy.
Moreover
, the creativity and joyfulness of a
teacher
 may encourage
students
 to learn and feel inspired to be like their
teacher
 unknowingly.
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