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Nowadays, a growing number of people with health problems are trying alternative medicines and treatments instead of visiting their usual doctor. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

#people #health #alternative #medicines #treatments #doctor #development
There is no doubt that
people
 have a lot of treatment options
thesedays
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these days
. There are sets of
people
 who prefer to use alternative pills and methods
instead
 of seeing their GP. In my view, it has many drawbacks and can cause numerous problems
on
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human
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 body. In
this
 essay, I will scrutinize
this
 notion and I will indicate my opinion with relevant examples. To commence with, not only are unprescribed or
althernative
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alternative
 medicines immensely dangerous, but
also
 they can create a resistance system to other important medicines.
For instance
,
according to
 a recent newspaper article, four out of ten essential antibiotics are not useful for some diseases
due to
 they are not effective anymore.
Hence
, if
population
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 prefer to use some pills without recommendation by doctors, other treatment ways could be useless.
Other negative impact
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 could be side effects on
people
’s
body
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bodies
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. After consuming
these kind
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 of products, internal organs namely kidneys, liver, heart or muscles will show some unexpected reactions
such
 as allergies, failures or disorders.
Moreover
, these symptoms could be fatal
specially
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 for
eldery
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elderly
people
 or children.
As a consequence
,
people
 can be more sick
instead
 of healing. To increase these bad effects, the government should take some actions. In conclusion,
usage
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 of
these kind
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 of products could be extremely dangerous and can bring many problems
within
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. In order to reduce their
influences
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influence
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,
goverments
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governments
government
 can inform their communities and they can new
regulation
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regulations
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 for
production
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the production
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 and
serving
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 of these things.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • alternative medicines
  • treatments
  • positive development
  • negative development
  • health problems
  • usual doctor
  • access
  • personalized approach
  • holistic well-being
  • lack of regulation
  • evidence-based research
  • proper medical treatment
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