The table's below show people reasons for giving up smoking, and when they intended to give up.
One of
this
tables givesCorrect determiner usage
these
the
information about why people try to prevent smoking, Correct article usage
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while
the other table illustrates the time they intend to give up smoking.
However
, it is clear that
the main reason for stop
smoking is for Replace the word
stopping
the
better Correct article usage
apply
for
health in general, Change preposition
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while
the lowest proportion shows present health problems as the reason for giveup
. Correct your spelling
giving
Although
, 31% of people try to prevent smoking because of financial problems.
Moreover
, we can see that the total percentage that intends
to stop is 71%, Correct subject-verb agreement
intend
whereas
12% of smokers try to intend within the next month. Nevertheless
, the
most people say they will stop smoking within the next six months. 22% of the smokers who smoke more than 20 cigarettes per day try to intend within the next year. Correct article usage
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On the other hand
, 29% say that they will not stop smoking.
Overall
, looking for more information, the reasons for stop
smoking are health issuesReplace the word
stopping
,
and financial and family problems.Remove the comma
apply
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