children nowadays watch significantly more television than in the past, which reduces their activity levels accordingly. Why is this the case? what measures can you suggest to encourage higher level of activity among children

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importand
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in
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their

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life. every
childreans
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children
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learn in that time,
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theri
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there
their

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caractry
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character

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do. formerly
chlrean
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children
clean

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pley
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play

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strict

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with
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theri
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their

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friends.
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unfortunate

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, it is change
navoays
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envoys

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. many kids
siting
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sitting

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at home and
woch
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watch

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elevition
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elevation
television

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, play games or
surfing
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enternet
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Internet

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have
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some
advantage
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advantages

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and
disadvantage
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one
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hand, a lot of
childrian wotch
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children watch

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more television
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then
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than

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in the past. because we are live
tecnoloji
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technology

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time. of
course
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,course

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children
shuld woch televition
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should watch television

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but
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much. if they
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wach
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wish
watch

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mach
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match

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televeion
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television

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, it
is effect
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effects

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theri
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their
there

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ability
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abilities

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such
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as
sport
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sports

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or
reletitionship
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relationship

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with other friends.
for example
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,
one
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of my
frien's
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friend's

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son
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sons

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wach televition
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watches television

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8 hours in
day
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the day
a day

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. the kid
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broken
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broke

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his eyes and he
have
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has

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galases
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glasses
galaxies

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and he
don't
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doesn't

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have
good
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a good

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reletationship
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relationship
relationships

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wit
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with

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his
friand
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friend

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,
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apply

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when he
toholk
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took

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other kids he gets shy so
much
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apply

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.
the
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example shows us,
one
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day will come
presents
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to presents

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bloket
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blokes
blanket

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woching televiton
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watching television

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or
sochal
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social

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media for
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theri
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their

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cheldrian
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children

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.
on the other hand
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,
televition
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television
televisions

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have benefit side like
resorch
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research

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lessons or learning some things. there are many
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informatatin
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information

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in
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on

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televatation
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elevation

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like dekumentrys
program
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programs

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. it
is gives
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gives

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many
informatation
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information

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about
live
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life

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.
chelren
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children

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can
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wach
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watch

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dekumantry and get
informatatin
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information

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for
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instance,
one
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of
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the childn
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childn
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children

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his name is Ali and live
Turkey
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in Turkey

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.
ali
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Ali

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one
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day
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wach
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watch

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a dekumantry in
televetation
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elevation

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when he was 13 years old. the
decumantry
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documentary

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was about
plane
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the plane
a plane

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fly
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flight

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. when Ali was
wach
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the
decomentry
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documentary

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he got a
dissance
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distance

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and
want
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towant

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be
pilot
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a pilot

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.
navoday
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Today

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the kid
the
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is the

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most
populer
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popular

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pilot in
the
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apply

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Turkey. if he didn't
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wach
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watch

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the
decomentry
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documentary

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meybe
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maybe

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he
couldent
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couldn't

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be
pilot
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a pilot

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and
chuse
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chose

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other jab
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another jab
other jabs

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.
to sum up
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, yes,
televetion
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television

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effet our
chldren
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children

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life
for
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on

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bad
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the bad

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side,
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however
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,however

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it
has
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tohas

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befit side. we couldn't
out
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put

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it in our life we
neet
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need

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it for
commucatation
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communication
commutation

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for
fallawing
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following
fallowing

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som
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some

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people or
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wach
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watch

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movia
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movie

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or cartons. in my opinion,
famalys
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families

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can put
limit
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a limit

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for
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on

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waching televetion
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watching television

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. in
this
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way,
chelrean
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children

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con not
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wach
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watch

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to
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too

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much the best
exaample
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example
examples

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of
this
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is,
one
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of my
friend
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friends

The singular countable noun friend follows the quantifier one of, which requires a plural noun. Consider using a plural noun or a different quantifier.

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has
program
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a program

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for
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theri childrian
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their children

The words theri childrian seem to be misspelled. Consider replacing them.

. the
kisd
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kind
kids

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shoold
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should
school

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fnish
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finish

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first
home work
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homework

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then
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

they can go to play in
street
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the street

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faynili they let
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wach
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watch

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televetion
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television
elevation

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. they are so
succesful
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successful

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about
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in

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iy
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it

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because they
cheldrian
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children

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very
seccesful
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successful

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for
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abilty
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ability

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, at school and riletationshio
for
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Answer the 'Problem and Solution' topic

Problem-and-solution essays fall naturally into two parts, the first describing and exploring the problem, the second setting out the solution or solutions.

You essay structure should look something like this:

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – Problems
  • Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • One of the first problems of the...
  • Another problem that needs to be considered...
  • A possible solution to this problem would be...
  • One immediate practical solution is to...

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