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Question It is observed that today communication between family members in today’s times is less as compared to the past. However, some people do not think so. Do you agree or disagree?

#communication #members #today’s #times #people
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 days, some
people
 believe that
communication
 with family
member
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members
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 has decreased as compared to the past. On the other side, some
people
 think
is
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that is
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 not the case.
In
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this
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am completely agree
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the
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that
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communication
 has deteriorated in the
last
 period of
time
.
To begin
 with,
people
has
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have
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 to work longer hours which
decrease
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decreases
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the
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their
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 interactions with other family
members
. The main reason
of
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that is
 inflation in many countries around the world
make
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makes
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people
 need to work longer hours to be able to afford their bills.
Consequently
,
this
 has a negative impact
in
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on
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 the
time
 they are able to spend with their
children's
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children
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or other family
members
.
For example
, in the UK has an increase of 20% of
people
 need to do
over
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overtime
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time
 at work to be able to afford their utilities.
Furthermore
,
people
 are passing more
time
in
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on
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 social media rather than interacting
face to
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face-to
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face
.
Therefore
,
people
 prefer to speak to their family
in
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on
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 their telephone even if they are in the same house which affects social interactions with
your
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apply
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family
members
.
This
 can
impacted
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impact
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negative
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negatively
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 in the
communication
 between the family.
For instance
, in
this
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these
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times
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time
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people
 are spending 40 % of their
times
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time
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in
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on
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 social media which
decrease
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decreases
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the
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apply
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personal interactions. In conclusion, the
communication
 between family
members
 has reduced over
time
. In
these
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this
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essay
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 we discussed the reason
of
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 that. In my opinion,
this
 has happened due
the
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time
spending
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spent
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in
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on
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 social media and television
instaed
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instead
to
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interactive
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interact
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face to
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face-to-face
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face
 with your family.
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