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Question It is observed that today communication between family members in today’s times is less as compared to the past. However, some people do not think so. Do you agree or disagree?

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 days, some
people
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 believe that
communication
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member
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members
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 has decreased as compared to the past. On the other side, some
people
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 think
is
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that is
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 not the case.
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this
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am completely agree
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the
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that
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communication
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 has deteriorated in the
last
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 period of
time
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.
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 with,
people
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has
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have
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 to work longer hours which
decrease
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decreases
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the
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their
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 interactions with other family
members
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. The main reason
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that is
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 inflation in many countries around the world
make
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people
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 need to work longer hours to be able to afford their bills.
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,
this
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 has a negative impact
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 the
time
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 they are able to spend with their
children's
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children
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or other family
members
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.
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, in the UK has an increase of 20% of
people
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 need to do
over
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overtime
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time
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 at work to be able to afford their utilities.
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,
people
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 are passing more
time
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in
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 social media rather than interacting
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face to
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face
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.
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,
people
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 prefer to speak to their family
in
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on
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 their telephone even if they are in the same house which affects social interactions with
your
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apply
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family
members
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.
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 can
impacted
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impact
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negative
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negatively
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 in the
communication
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 between the family.
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, in
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this
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these
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times
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time
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people
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 are spending 40 % of their
times
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time
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in
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on
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 social media which
decrease
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decreases
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the
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apply
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personal interactions. In conclusion, the
communication
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 between family
members
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 has reduced over
time
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. In
these
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essay
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 we discussed the reason
of
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 that. In my opinion,
this
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 has happened due
the
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to the
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time
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spending
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spent
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in
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 social media and television
instaed
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instead
to
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of
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interactive
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interact
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face to
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face-to-face
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face
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 with your family.

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