Mrs. Barette, an English-speaking woman who lives in your town, has advertised for someone to help her in her home for few hours a day next summer. Write a letter to Mrs. Barette. In your letter suggest how you could help her in her home say why you would like to do this work explain when you will and will not available

#mrs #barette #woman #lives #town #someone #home #hours #summer #work

Dear Mrs. Barette, I hope

this

letter finds you in best of the spirits and radiant health. I am writing

this

letter

with

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context to the advertisement in which you asked for someone to help you

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apply

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next summer. I am willing to help you. I would be delighted to babysit your children for

few

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hours a day. I am offering

this

help because I adore your wards and by babysitting them I would give myself an opportunity to spend some quality time with them.

Moreover

, it will help me to complete an assignment on

child's

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psychology given to me by my class teacher.

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, by offering

this

help I will

be benefitted

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both ways.

However

, I will be with you for the entire summer except

last

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week of July, as I have promised my grandparents to visit them and stay with them for a week. I hope you will accept

this

proposal and allow me to help you. I am looking forward to hearing from you. Yours faithfully, Jatinder.

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task achievement

Consider providing a more detailed explanation of the tasks you can perform for Mrs. Barette to enhance task achievement.

coherence cohesion

Try to ensure each paragraph focuses on a single idea for better clarity.

task achievement

The letter has a friendly and respectful tone, which is very suitable for this context.

coherence cohesion

The letter is well-structured with clear sections for each required point, such as offering help, stating reasons, and availability.

coherence cohesion

Good use of greetings and sign-offs, which enhances the politeness of the letter.

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5Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Grammar mistakes
 

7 paragraphs

170 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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