Mrs. Barette, an English-speaking woman who lives in your town, has advertised for someone to help her in her home for few hours a day next summer. Write a letter to Mrs. Barette. In your letter suggest how you could help her in her home say why you would like to do this work explain when you will and will not available

#mrs #barette #woman #lives #town #someone #home #hours #summer #work

✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?

Dear Mrs. Barette, I hope

this

letter finds you in best of the spirits and radiant health. I am writing

this

letter

with

Change preposition

show examples

context to the advertisement in which you asked for someone to help you

Change preposition

apply

show examples

next summer. I am willing to help you. I would be delighted to babysit your children for

few

Correct article usage

a few

show examples

hours a day. I am offering

this

help because I adore your wards and by babysitting them I would give myself an opportunity to spend some quality time with them.

Moreover

, it will help me to complete an assignment on

child's

Change noun form

child

show examples

psychology given to me by my class teacher.

Hence

, by offering

this

help I will

be benefitted

Wrong verb form

benefit

show examples

both ways.

However

, I will be with you for the entire summer except

last

Correct article usage

the last

show examples

week of July, as I have promised my grandparents to visit them and stay with them for a week. I hope you will accept

this

proposal and allow me to help you. I am looking forward to hearing from you. Yours faithfully, Jatinder.

Submitted by mrsdns on Thu Oct 03 2024

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

task achievement

Consider providing a more detailed explanation of the tasks you can perform for Mrs. Barette to enhance task achievement.

coherence cohesion

Try to ensure each paragraph focuses on a single idea for better clarity.

task achievement

The letter has a friendly and respectful tone, which is very suitable for this context.

coherence cohesion

The letter is well-structured with clear sections for each required point, such as offering help, stating reasons, and availability.

coherence cohesion

Good use of greetings and sign-offs, which enhances the politeness of the letter.

5
Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6
Grammar mistakes
detected issues

0123456789.0505

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

7 paragraphs

170 words

🚀 Prepare for IELTS writing section today!

Unlimited Task 1 & Task 2 checks
Practice with essays, charts, and letters.
Personalized suggestions & mistake analysis
Spot every mistake and boost your score.
Topic ideas & vocabulary helpers
Expand your ideas and use the right words.
Progress tracking
Watch your writing improve with every practice.

What to do next:

Look at other essays:

7.5
band
People nowadays are living longer than before, resulting in increasing in aging population. Some people believe that this situation could create negative issues for the governments. While, others suggest there are some benefits.
People nowadays are living longer than before, resulting in an increasingly ageing population. Some people believe that this situation could create negative issues for the governments. While others suggest there are some benefits. In this essay, both negative and positive consequences associated with this ageing population will be discussed in detail before the conclusion is reached.
5
band
The government should lower the budget on the arts in order to allocate more money to education. To what extent do you agree?
The proposal for prioritizing education over arts through cutting down expenses of arts and putting up money spent on education sector. I completely agree with government’s stance on this matter. Spend more on education.
5
band
Many people try to balance work and other parts of their life. However, this is very difficult to do. What are the problems associated with this? What is the best way to achieve better balance?
These days a lot of people really try hard to create a balance between work and other aspects of life. This essay will discuss two primary complication that are affected by this issue followed by ways to solve those issue.
7
band
Some people say that it is possible to tell a lot about a person’s culture and character from their choice of clothes. Do you agree or disagree?
Many people believe that they can judge human culture and character based on their dress. I entirely disagree, it is impossible to assess humans according to their clothes.
7
band
Some people feel that boarding schools (where students or pupils live at the school during the term) are an excellent option for children, while other people disagree for a number of reasons. Consider both sides of this debate and reach a conclusion.
Educational organizations are crucial for people who attend, especially schools, which build up the knowledge of most academic people. Day schools could not be the case for everyone, therefore the idea of boarding schools has been launched, but some believe that these type of schools is an extraordinary chance for the young generation. This essay will discuss the debate, and give a concluding view.

People nowadays are living longer than before, resulting in increasing in aging population. Some people believe that this situation could create negative issues for the governments. While, others suggest there are some benefits.

The government should lower the budget on the arts in order to allocate more money to education. To what extent do you agree?

Many people try to balance work and other parts of their life. However, this is very difficult to do. What are the problems associated with this? What is the best way to achieve better balance?

Some people say that it is possible to tell a lot about a person’s culture and character from their choice of clothes. Do you agree or disagree?

Some people feel that boarding schools (where students or pupils live at the school during the term) are an excellent option for children, while other people disagree for a number of reasons. Consider both sides of this debate and reach a conclusion.