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The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

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The map displays a public
park
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 called Grange
Park
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 when it
initially
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 opened in 1920, and how it looks now.
Overall
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, the
park
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 layout has been updated to include modern facilities, which have replaced some natural features. The updates have improved the
park
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's accessibility and functionality. The two entrances on Arnold Avenue and
Eldon
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Street
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 have remained unchanged.
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, the
park
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 now has an underground car
park
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, and a right-side entrance from
Eldon
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Street
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 was constructed for car
park
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 users. Once inside the
park
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 from
Eldon
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Street
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, the central
feature
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 used to be a fountain, which has now been replaced by a rose garden surrounded by seats. To the right of the
Eldon
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Street
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 entrance, a water
feature
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 has been added, taking the place of the previous glasshouse and seating area. A café and children's play area now occupy the space where the rose garden and water plants' pound used to be, opposite the water
feature
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. The
park
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's left side, which previously housed a stage for musicians, now features an amphitheatre. The only unchanged
feature
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 in
this
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 area is the rose garden on the Arnold Avenue side.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • recreational facilities
  • landscaping
  • naturalistic
  • amenities
  • formal gardens
  • ergonomic
  • symmetric designs
  • inclusive
  • accessible
  • accommodations
  • native plant species
  • societal changes
  • visitor services
  • community events
  • evolution
  • modern playgrounds
  • wildflower meadows
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