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some people think cities are the best place to live. Orthers prefer to live in the countryside. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #cities #place #orthers #countryside
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Nowadays, a major of
people
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 love to live in
cities
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 where the facilities are developed and modern with the life cost is more expensive.
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 that, some
people
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 are keen on living in the
countryside
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. Living in
cities
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 has what benefits to
people
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? If we live in
cities
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 everything is more costly because of overpopulation, and modern things.
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 the high price,
people
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 can get a job easily in
cities
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. So living in
cities
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 offer citizens to earn more money than the rural
areas
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 because the important number of companies and employment chance is higher in urban
areas
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 than in rural
areas
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. A lot of come to
cities
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 because they could not earn enough money to survive so they wanted to make more money which they had done before.
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,
people
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 would like to live in the
countryside
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 because suburbs have a slower pace of life than
cities
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. Next to that, another advantage of rural
areas
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 is that
people
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's health is healthier than citizens' health. So, as
cities
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 make citizens less healthy, they tend to live in the
countryside
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. What's more, air pollution is one of the vital problems in rural
areas
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.
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,
people
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 who live in China's big
cities
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 have to put masks on their faces because of the pollution.
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, one prefers to live in rural
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.
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, when living in a city compare with living in the
countryside
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, there are various not only advantages but
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 disadvantages. But in my opinion, my finance will help me to cure my illness, daily living expenses. Because medicine is developing more and more so live in
cities
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 despite being polluted, if we know how to protect ourselves, nothing is impossible.
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