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It is inevitable that traditional cultures will be lost as technology develops. Technology and traditional cultures are incompatible. To what extent do you agree and disagree with this view.

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As science and
technology
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 have improved by leaps and bounds, a great many traditional
cultures
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 worldwide have been lost and the trend may continue in future, which
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 makes some people believe that both aspects cannot coexist in a proper manner. From my perspective, I am not in favour of the view, believing that they are inclusive rather than exclusive. On the one hand, many ancient
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 have faded away under the influence of new technologies. For one thing, scientific discoveries drive people to explore the unknown world.
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, the advance in navigation brought Westerners to American Continent, which not only killed millions of native Indians but removed a great number of precious Indian
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 from Earth with killing and assimilation. For another, the
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also
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 poses a threat to local civilizations in countries and regions where they are not colonized by Westerners. Influenced by Western
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 spread by modern technologies,
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 as radio, internet and so on, people in Japan and South Korea prefer Western customs and festivals to local ones, speeding up the disappearance of some indigenous traditions and customs.
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, science and
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 play a big role in preserving traditional
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. First of all, all traditional procedures and details can be recorded through videos, which can be passed on to future generations.
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, most things had lost because books and paintings can only store clips of the culture and they are easily distorted by errors and misunderstandings.
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, it would not be difficult for us to understand some rituals in ancient Egypt and Greece if they were taken by cameras.
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, the modern transport system brings tourist to tribes living in remote areas, which make it possible to preserve local
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 from tourism revenues. In conclusion,
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technology
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 contributes greatly to the distinction of many
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, it can
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 save some local civilizations from going extinct,
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 thriving with technological advances.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • inevitable
  • traditional cultures
  • technological development
  • modern society
  • incompatible
  • decline
  • traditional crafts
  • rituals
  • digital communication
  • preserve
  • promote
  • documentation
  • online archives
  • virtual museums
  • social media
  • coexist
  • integrates
  • digital storytelling
  • augmented reality
  • cultural tourism
  • perspective
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