The pie charts illustrates the number of sales in different spheres of online shopping in New Zealand during 10 years.

The pie charts illustrates the number of sales in different spheres of online shopping in New Zealand during 10 years.
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The bar charts illustrate the proportion of
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online marketing product in New Zealand in 10 years after 2003.
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the highest percentage in 2003,
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droped
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dropped
to second rank in 2013.
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with 2003, the majority of products that show on
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travel trip, with 36%. Followed by, 24% of clothes and the
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the second highest in
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year. The combination between film and music and books
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40%, 21%
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the former and 19%
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the latter. Turning to the next pie chart. 2013 experienced a
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increase in the
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film
and music to 33%, and
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the first highest rank. Followed by, the trip
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dropped drastically to 29%,
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the second highest in
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period.
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remaining categories, including clothes and books, the book
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a slight growth to 22%,
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the clothes suffered a drastic decline to 16%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words was with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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