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The table below gives information about rail transport in four contries in 2007.

The table below gives information about rail transport in four contries in 2007.
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The table shows data about railroad transportation in Malaysia,
Canada
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,
China
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 and the
UAE
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 in 2007.
Overall
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,
China
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 had the largest
number
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 of
people
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 who use
rail
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transport
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, accompanied by the longest
kilometres
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 per head of population taking,
while
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 the smallest figures for
people
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 taking
rail
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transport
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 and the shortest distance per person taking can be seen in
Canada
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.
However
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,
Canada
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 had the largest cargo-carried ability. In terms of the
number
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 of
people
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 using
rail
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transport
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, the figure for
China
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 was 27
million
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, which was significantly higher than the other three countries, almost five times as large as the figure for the second-largest country-Malaysia (5.9
million
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).
This
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 was followed by the
UAE
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, with the
number
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 of
people
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 at 5.5
million
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.
Canada
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 had the smallest
number
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 of
people
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 who takes
rail
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transport
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, with only 0.3
million
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people
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. Regarding passenger
kilometres
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 per person taking,
China
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 presented the longest distance, which was 1980
kilometres
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. The
UAE
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 and Malaysia had similar data, and the figures for them were 780 and 770
kilometres
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 respectively,
whereas
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Canada
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 only had 80
kilometres
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 per person, which was considerably shorter than the other three nations. Interestingly,
Canada
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 had the largest cargo-carried capacity (28.20
tons
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), followed by
China
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 (23.01
tons
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) and Malaysia (22.2
tons
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), slightly higher than the
UAE
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 (21.9
tons
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).
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Vocabulary: Replace the words canada, china, uae, number, people, rail, transport, kilometres, million, tons with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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