the table below shows the participation of people over 15 in selected sports and physical recreation activities by gender in Westview during theperiod 2018-19

the table below shows the participation of people over 15 in selected sports and physical recreation activities by gender in Westview during theperiod 2018-19
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The given table provides the percentages of different types of body activities and physical games of individuals who are aged at least 15 and grouped by their gender in the area called Westview in 2018-19.
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, it can be seen that both
males
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and females prefer to walk as a way of exercise and traditional games like football or golf are played more by
males
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than women. If we focus more on detail, both boys and girls prefer to go to gyms but women are more interested in walking and gyms. There is more than a 10% gap between the proportion of females of Westview and the
males
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on
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way of exercise To focus on the rest of the data set we can observe that the percentage of women participation in traditional games which require group activity like basketball and outdoor football is 0%,
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,
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of Westview did not practice Yoga at all during 2018-19,
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Netball
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