The bar chart shows coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cuties. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart shows coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cuties.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and comparisons where relevant.
This
bar graph gives the information about proportion of
city
residents
about
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buying drinking tea and
coffee
in five different Australian cities during the
last
four weeks.
However
,
it is clear that
the percentage of citizens who went to cafes
in
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last
week is the highest,
while
bought
instant
coffee
took the second place in four countries,
instead
of Adelaide. Though, the lowest proportion of residents bought fresh
coffee
in the
last
month.
Moreover
, Brisbane has the least amount of people who bought
coffee
in fresh,
whereas
Syndey has the greatest amount. Melbourne is the
city
with people who often went to a cafe in
last
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month at 60%. 54% of the civilians in Hobart
city
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had bought
instant
coffee
within the past 30 days. Melbourne is the second greatest
city
with the value of citizens
bought
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instant
coffee
.
Furthermore
, the difference between people who bought
instant
coffee
and went to
the
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a
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cafe in Adelaide is 1%. In ,Brisbane 33% of residents had bought fresh
coffee
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
Vocabulary: Replace the words city, coffee, instant with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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