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The bar chart shows coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cuties. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart shows coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cuties. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and comparisons where relevant.
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This
 bar graph gives the information about proportion of
city
 residents
about
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buying drinking tea and
coffee
 in five different Australian cities during the
last
 four weeks.
However
,
it is clear that
 the percentage of citizens who went to cafes
in
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last
 week is the highest,
while
 bought
instant
coffee
 took the second place in four countries,
instead
 of Adelaide. Though, the lowest proportion of residents bought fresh
coffee
 in the
last
 month.
Moreover
, Brisbane has the least amount of people who bought
coffee
 in fresh,
whereas
 Syndey has the greatest amount. Melbourne is the
city
 with people who often went to a cafe in
last
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 month at 60%. 54% of the civilians in Hobart
city
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City
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 had bought
instant
coffee
 within the past 30 days. Melbourne is the second greatest
city
 with the value of citizens
bought
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buying
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instant
coffee
.
Furthermore
, the difference between people who bought
instant
coffee
 and went to
the
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a
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 cafe in Adelaide is 1%. In ,Brisbane 33% of residents had bought fresh
coffee
.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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