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Some people say that when buying a product (e.g. a mobile/cell phone), or choosing a service (e.g. medical treatment), price is the most important thing to consider. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Sometimes, humans believe that price is one of the most important aspects of buying something,
for example
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,
goods
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 (cell phone/mobile phone) or
services
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 (medical treatment, etc).
People
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 are always considering the cost that will be used by them.
This
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 is affected by their financial situation. Individuals who have less income will choose something cheaper than expensive ones. They do not have a choice for picking up the
goods
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 or
services
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 because of budget limitations.
On the other hand
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, wealthy
people
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 will choose only useful
goods
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 or
services
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. Those
products
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 are usually cheaper than others. Individuals are seeing the utility factor of the
products
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. Sometimes, cheap
products
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 are good enough to be used and long
last
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. If you want to buy cheap
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 or
services
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, you must check those items first.
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 ask the seller about their built quality so you can convince them of the
products
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.
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,
People
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 think that expensive
products
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 are affected by the brand (branding). If you are buying branded
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, you must pay a huge of money for those
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. It will be affecting your financial aspects unless you are wealthy
people
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.
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, price is still one of the most important factors that
people
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 check when buying something. Cheaper
products
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 can be useful too. Occasionally, branded
products
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 do not mean giving all the best-built quality so you do not have to trust the brand itself.
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 situation depends on money in your pocket but
people
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 will choose cheaper
products
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at the end
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