Some people believe that it is important to introduce tax education in secondary school. Other people think that it is a waste of valuable school time. Discuss both views and give you opinion.

Nowadays,
tax
began to be implemented in various aspects of life. Some citizens believe that
tax
education
in junior high
school
is very crucial. Meanwhile,
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other people said that it is a waste of
school
time worth. In my opinion,
tax
education
is not
prioritize
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rather than
focus
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focused
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on the quality of
school
. On the one hand,
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rate cannot be implemented
to
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all
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schools
without any clear reasons. The parents will
questioning
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what is the goal of that issue
especially
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for children which still
under age
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underage
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.
For example
, parents in Surabaya
having
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a complaint to their children's
schools
about regulations to add more money for
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.
Furthermore
, the
teachers
can explain more details and
specific
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specifics
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about
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tax
planning so as not to cause conflict in the future.
On the other hand
, the teacher should prioritize the quality of the curriculum first before
implement
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a
tax
education
. If the teacher
focus
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focuses
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on the rate, they will become
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money oriented and it can
affects
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to teach their students without taking
carefully
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it carefully
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.
For instance
, one of the
teachers
in my junior high
schools
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school
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offers
a special rates
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special rates
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if we ask for
a private sessions
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a private session
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outside the
schools
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school
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.
However
, it was actually
teachers
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teachers'
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responsibility to teach without any additional fees. In conclusion,
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teachers
should not prioritize
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tax
education
which will
triggered
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a conflict
to
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between
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the
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parents and students. In the future, the
teachers
can focus on the quality of their
school
so they can have a similar syllabus
like
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an international
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an international school
international schools
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schools
.
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