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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Modern technology is creating a single world culture. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.

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Many people claim that with the development of modern ,technology something called a single
world
culture
 (aka globalisation) is being created. Personally ,speaking I have to say that I disagree with the idea, because it is a fact that each nation has and protects its own cultural heritage. First and foremost it is worth considering that every different nation has its own
culture
 as said above. From my point of view the fact that there are many various cultures in the
world
 in which we live , is creating a colourful, dynamic, tasteful and worth exploring the earth. It goes without saying that if we as people didn’t have different kinds of cultures all around the globe, we definitely wouldn’t like to travel to other countries as much as we do now. To me travelling is one of the most precious assets which we have,
therefore
, in the name of not losing the joy of it, I do not think that we will give up on our own cultures in the future. There is no denying that
due to
 modern technology human civilization, society and lifestyle are consistently receiving improvements
such
 as modern medicine, types of transportation (high-speed trains or planes), and the uncountable positive effects of the internet.
Besides
 we are experiencing a global trend that seems to be leading us towards having a single
world
culture
.
Although
 it occurs that we will have a single
world
culture
, it can be clearly said that
,
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 countries and nations which have deep connections to their legacy, would never be parts of a single
world
culture
 ,
consequently
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 we cannot mention a single
world
culture
, without even one country that doesn’t feel that way.
To conclude
, it is obvious that modern technology has several benefits and perks and it is trying to create a dominant
world
culture
 ,
however
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 I see no future
that
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 any of the valuable histories having countries forget their ancestors and the
culture
 they built.
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task response
Ensure that your introduction clearly states your opinion and introduces the main points you will discuss in the essay. Conclude with a strong restatement of your opinion and a summary of your main points.
coherence cohesion
The logical structure of your essay is generally clear, but consider restructuring some sentences for better flow and coherence. Additionally, ensure that your conclusion effectively summarizes the main points and restates your opinion.

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