You live in a room in college which you share with another student. However, there are many problems with this arrangement. Write a letter to accommodation officer regarding this. - Describe the situation - Explain the problem and why it is difficult to work. - Say what kind of accommodation you prefer.

Dear Sir or Madam, Allow me to introduce myself, my name is William and I am
third-year
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business student. I am writing
this
letter regarding my dorm problems. Allow me to explain the details.
To begin
with, I am living in Ducati's Dorm
with
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room
number 321 since the first day of college. During my study, I usually
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this
room
with no problems
occurs
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with
previous
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person
although
I had to work after my study.
Furthermore
, I
had
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worked from 5 PM to 9 PM on weekdays in
cafe
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a cafe
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near the university.
On the other hand
, my current sharing
room
makes me hard to work, because he always
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online streaming
video
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loudly.
During
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this
situation, I already discuss with him about my schedule and ask him to lower the sound of
video
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or
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headphone
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while
watching the video. Unfortunately, He didn't take any responses to
this
issue. I'd
like
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ask for your help
about
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this
situation. I'm looking forward to
resolve
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this
matter by changing my roommate or moving me to
other
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room
. Yours Faithfully, William
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