Some people say that the clothes people wear are the most important indication of what they are like. Others, however, say that people should not be judged by the clothes they wear. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

It is argued that the way
people
dress
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themselves
while
others believe that they
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be valued by it. I think the reason behind what
people
choose to use can
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vary based on its purpose and
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essay will elaborate more through the following paragraph. On the
one
hand, the reason
people
choose their fashion
mostly
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based on their personal
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which is the
one
that can make them feel comfortable rather than trend or brand. Sometimes they
also
pay attention to the color and appearance of the stuff
while
doing shopping since it may boost their mood.
For instance
, I personally will choose shirts based on the
color
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and the material and
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most
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the
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shirts are used
in
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the
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long period because it suits me.
On the other hand
, some
people
argue that we do not have to value others
according to
what they wear since we do not know who they are or where they come from.
One
general example: in some difficult moments
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we
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did not pay attention to the costume
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but rather
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than
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with the problem. It
also
might be caused by personal reasons why
people
wear informal or casual suits when we meet them
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some formal event.
Therefore
we do not have any right to justify others based on what they wear.
To conclude
,
people
generally will choose
fashion
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style to the
one
that suits them and they tend to choose it
according to
the occasion,
thus
we cannot simply judge them even
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the
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first sight since we do not know what happens or why they dress up like that.
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