The graph below shows the percentage of households with different kinds of technology in the U.S. from 1995 to 1999. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
The provided line graph illustrates the
usage
of various technologies in US households from 1995 to 2000.
Overall
, it is evident that there was an increase in the usage
of all technologies by residents throughout the given period, despite occasional fluctuations. Notably, the washing machine had the highest usage
ratio between 1995 and 1999.
In 1995, each line on the graph started at a different point. Over the years, the usage
of washing machines and computers experienced steady growth. The percentage of households utilizing washing machines ranged from 60% to 80%, making it the most widely used technology among US residents. Similarly
, computer usage
witnessed a similar upward trend, increasing from 40% to 70%. The period between 1995 and 1999 saw a significant shift in phone usage
by US residents, rising from below 20% to almost 80%.
Between 1995 and 1999, there were minor fluctuations in the usage
of the Internet and DVD players. Internet usage
began at a low point of 10% in 1995, which was the lowest starting figure compared to other technologies. DVD player usage
in the US experienced a gradual decline from 25% to 15% between 1995 and 1996,
but Remove the comma
apply
subsequently
rose steadily to reach 40% in 1999.
In this
revised version, I have attempted to address any grammatical errors, while
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