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Watching TV has positive effacts on children. Do you agree or disagree with the statement?

#tv #effacts #children
Nowadays
TV
 considers
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some
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essential
of
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life
in
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every
hours
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. Parents think that
TV
 can bring a good effect
in
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on
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 their
child
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child's
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life
. I totally disagree
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this
a
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statement, that
TV
 can not harm
life
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the life
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 and mind
for
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children
. In fact that
TV
 cost
alot
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a lot
 of harm to their
kids
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kid's
kids'
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life
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live
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meny
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many
 ways. They argued that
the
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television can provide educational
programes
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programmes
programs
 that teach value and
lesson
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lessons
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 about
life
. I do not think
this
 is valid for
children
 because
,
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 kids exposure to poetry infection
programes
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programmes
programs
which
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have
negative
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a negative
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effact
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effect
effects
 when they are seen
like
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 crime and violence frequently. They will try to act likely
behavior
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 in real
life
.
Moreover
,
children
 spend plenty of
time
watchig
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watching
TV
 so
that
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reduos
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reduces
the
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study
time
. As
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result
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 they do poorly in school and get
lowre
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lower
marke
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market
.
What
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 more, most people think that
tv
time
 is
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an apportunity
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apportunity
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opportunity
 to
spent
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time
 with families. I do not agree with all
this
,
children
 used
time
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the time
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 to watch
TV
 rather than go outside and play with other kids or do something useful. To summarise, l would say that,
TV
 cost
alot
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a lot
 of
nagetive
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negative
 in
Children
's
life
 it affect
thier
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their
behavior
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behaviour
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 when
see
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indecent
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the indecent
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 show , study and
the
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socialis
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social
life
 as well.
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