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In many places, new houses are needed, but the only space available for building them is in the countryside. Some people believe it is more important to protect the countryside and not build new homes there. What is your opinion about this?

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There are many places that need to build a new house, but unfortunately, there is a lack of space for building them .
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 , there is available space in the rural
areas
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. Certain individuals believe that in today's world, we have to protect the
countryside
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 and they shouldn't build new homes. On the one hand , The 21st century has witnessed phenomena
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 as the IT revolution and globalization because of the internet and digital technologies. In other words, world development especially in the
cities
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 , so the majority of
people
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 prefer to live in the
cities
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 rather than rural
areas
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 .
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 , what is available in the
cities
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 is not available in the
countryside
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 in fact rural
areas
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 lack electricity and lack of infrastructure .
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, Life in the
countryside
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 is a little difficult compared to life in the
cities
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, especially from the work side.
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, there are many advantages to living in the
countryside
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.
People
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 who live in the
countryside
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 are healthier and happier.
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,
people
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 eat more vegetables and fruits
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, it is fresh and clean. In rural
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 life is simple and there are no pollution and traffic jams.
People
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 work in agriculture .
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, some
people
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 on their vacation prefer to spend more time in a quiet place so , they decide to go to the
countryside
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 to spend time with their family and enjoy the fresh air. In conclusion , I believe Today's world requires living in
cities
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, which brings development and progress.
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 there are many advantages that attract
people
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 to live in the
countryside
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.

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Coherence and Cohesion
Ensure a consistent development of ideas throughout paragraphs. Avoid sudden transitions that might disrupt the flow of text.
Task Achievement
Provide more specific examples to strengthen arguments, especially regarding differences between city and countryside living.
Coherence and Cohesion
The conclusion effectively summarizes the main ideas discussed in the essay and offers a clear opinion on the topic.
Task Achievement
There is a clear introduction that introduces the debate and sets the context for the discussion.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • housing shortage
  • preserving
  • natural habitats
  • biodiversity
  • responsible
  • sustainable development
  • government policies
  • urban development
  • alternative housing options
  • renovating
  • repurposing
  • unused spaces
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