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Your best friend is moving back to your city after being overseas for five years. Write a letter to convince your friend to move in with you. In the letter: - Explain how much you have missed your friend - Describe how you feel about your friend’s return - Give reasons that you and your friend should share a home

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Dear John, I hope
this
 letter finds you well. It's been a
while
 since our
last
 meeting. I missed you so much, buddy. We've been friends since our primary school days and have been almost inseparable since
then
. Even though you had to go to pursue your dream education at
such
 a fine university, the emotional side of me always wished that you stayed and we could study at our local university together. I am so glad that
finally
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 you are coming to stay in our hometown where we grew up together. I'm contemplating a lot of things these days
so
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that we will do together when you are here. As you know that there's no one who understands me as much as you do, I can't tell you have happy I am about your return.
Lastly
, how about we move in together in the same home? The price of properties has been skyrocketing in recent years, so it will be hard to afford a home by yourself.
Besides
, I'm in touch with a local house owner who has agreed to rent his house at a comparatively lower rate which would be perfect for us. I can't wait to meet you, buddy. Best wishes, Chris
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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