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Some people think cities are the best place to live. Others prefer to live in the countryside. Discuss both views and give your opinion

#people #cities #place #countryside
In
this
 day and age, some individuals consider
to live
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 in
the
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urban area than live dwell in
the
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suburban
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. In
this
 essay, I would discuss both of these views
,
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 and in my point of
view
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 I’m more inclined to agree with
this
 view. On the one hand, living in a
city
 may have the
high quality
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 standard of living.
City
 offers convenience to the resident as everyone in the modern day spends a busy life. Take welfare, treatment and
sociable
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 utilities as
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examples, it is
clearly
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 to say that all kinds of these standards are better in
city
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the city
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, so the dweller especially the workers may find it
worthy
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to live
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 and
work
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.
Moreover
,
with
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the
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employment opportunities,
traffic
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 system, good facilities and growing urbanization are the major reasons that attract more people to settle down.
City
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 is
the
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 place that
have
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 good
high quality
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 school so many parents attend
city
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 to give their children have
good
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 education.
On the other hand
,
besides
 some advantages, living in
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 urban area has
also
 many negative problems.
For example
: traffic
jam
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, pollution and pressure are the reasons that most residents get when they lie in
city
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.
Therefore
, moving to the
suburban
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 is the optimal way to enjoy
fresh
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 air with the idyllic
ambuence
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ambience
ambulance
. Not only that, some people can grow plants
vegetable
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, feed fish,
poultry
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and poultry
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. Living in rural
area
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 may help people to alleviate the stress thanks to the peaceful pace. In conclusion, in my opinion, I agree that living in the
city
 is better than living in the countryside.
However
, that’s just my perspective, living in the
city
 or countryside depends on your
desiration
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destination
desperation
.
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