The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

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The two maps compare the alternations of Grange Park in the year 1920 and

present

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time.

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it is clear that

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there is plenty of modifications in

two

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the two

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periods, but the entrances of

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and south of

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the plans

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remain in their location, and a rose garden

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remain

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in the north-west of both maps. In

the

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apply

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1920, a fountain was located

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the centre of the

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replaced with a square rose garden which is surrounded by four seats

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each

edges

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, a stage for musicians was situated near the fountain approximately in the west of the

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which is converted to an Amphitheatre for concerts now.

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both entrances in the north and south remain their locations, there is an additional entrance which is used for

underground

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an underground

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car park in the corner of the south-east

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now. It is noteworthy that the rose garden in the north-west

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its location,

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two others which were located in the north and south-west are removed and now a café builds in the north of the

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. In the east of a public park, a pond for water plants and a

Glass house

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are replaced with

children’s

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a children’s

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play area and water feature respectively.

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, all seats

were

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situated

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around the empty space

map

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are

dimilished

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diminished

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

5 paragraphs

218 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

recreational facilities
landscaping
naturalistic
amenities
formal gardens
ergonomic
symmetric designs
inclusive
accessible
accommodations
native plant species
societal changes
visitor services
community events
evolution
modern playgrounds
wildflower meadows

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Fully explain your ideas

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