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The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

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The two maps compare the alternations of Grange Park in the year 1920 and
present
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 time.
Overall
,
it is clear that
 there is plenty of modifications in
two
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 periods, but the entrances of
north
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 and south of
plans
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 remain in their location, and a rose garden
also
remain
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 in the north-west of both maps. In
the
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1920, a fountain was located
to
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 the centre of the
map
that is
 replaced with a square rose garden which is surrounded by four seats
in
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on
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 each
edges
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.
In addition
, a stage for musicians was situated near the fountain approximately in the west of the
map
 which is converted to an Amphitheatre for concerts now.
Although
 both entrances in the north and south remain their locations, there is an additional entrance which is used for
underground
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 car park in the corner of the south-east
map
 now. It is noteworthy that the rose garden in the north-west
remain
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 its location,
while
 two others which were located in the north and south-west are removed and now a café builds in the north of the
map
. In the east of a public park, a pond for water plants and a
Glass house
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 are replaced with
children’s
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a children’s
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 play area and water feature respectively.
Moreover
, all seats
were
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situated
in
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around the empty space
map
 are
dimilished
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diminished
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • recreational facilities
  • landscaping
  • naturalistic
  • amenities
  • formal gardens
  • ergonomic
  • symmetric designs
  • inclusive
  • accessible
  • accommodations
  • native plant species
  • societal changes
  • visitor services
  • community events
  • evolution
  • modern playgrounds
  • wildflower meadows
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