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Some people think cities are the best place to live. others prefer to live in the countryside. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Some
people
 think that it is
the
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most appropriate to live in the
cities
.
However
, there are still
people
argue
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who argue
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 that
countryside
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the countryside
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 is
a
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the
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 best place to live.
Therefore
, I will introduce my opinion about both views. On the one hand,
cities
 are the best place for studying and working. Indeed, there are a large number of big companies for applying
a
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good job or schools with high education that help you improve a lot in your study in the
cities
.
Furthermore
, the food in urban
areas
 is
also
 delicious and diverse
as well as
people
 can
also
 enjoy many entertaining activities
such
 as playing in theme parks, going to cinemas and so on.
Therefore
, it is a good idea to live in the
cities
, especially
youngsters
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.
On the other hand
, living in the
cities
also
 has
their
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 drawbacks like that there are so many traffic accidents in urban
areas
. It is actually true
due to
 the fact that there are more vehicles in the
cities
 than that in the countryside.
Moreover
, there is so much noise
and
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in metropolitan
areas
 so it is not a good idea for the old to live.
Thus
,
people
 who are old are not suitable to live in the
cities
.
Although
 living in the
cities
 has its drawbacks, it has so many benefits for many
people
 to settle down. To exemplify, it offers
people
, especially young
people
, more opportunities to develop themselves and more choices for entertainment.
Besides
, you can have a job that you can have enough salary for your family despite
of
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the high cost
for
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 accommodation and food. In conclusion, I am of my view to say that you should go to the
cities
 for living because they offer you modern facilities to work and study
as well as
 more chances to have a good life.
Nevertheless
, when you are old and you need a
peace
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 and quiet place, I advise you to move to rural
areas
 to live.
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