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Some people think cities are the best place to live. others prefer to live in the countryside. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Some
people
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 think that it is
the
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most appropriate to live in the
cities
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.
However
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, there are still
people
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argue
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who argue
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 that
countryside
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the countryside
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 is
a
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the
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 best place to live.
Therefore
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, I will introduce my opinion about both views. On the one hand,
cities
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 are the best place for studying and working. Indeed, there are a large number of big companies for applying
a
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for a
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good job or schools with high education that help you improve a lot in your study in the
cities
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.
Furthermore
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, the food in urban
areas
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 is
also
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 delicious and diverse
as well as
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people
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 can
also
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 enjoy many entertaining activities
such
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 as playing in theme parks, going to cinemas and so on.
Therefore
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, it is a good idea to live in the
cities
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, especially
youngsters
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for youngsters
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.
On the other hand
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, living in the
cities
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also
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 has
their
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its
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 drawbacks like that there are so many traffic accidents in urban
areas
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. It is actually true
due to
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 the fact that there are more vehicles in the
cities
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 than that in the countryside.
Moreover
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, there is so much noise
and
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in metropolitan
areas
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 so it is not a good idea for the old to live.
Thus
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,
people
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 who are old are not suitable to live in the
cities
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.
Although
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 living in the
cities
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 has its drawbacks, it has so many benefits for many
people
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 to settle down. To exemplify, it offers
people
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, especially young
people
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, more opportunities to develop themselves and more choices for entertainment.
Besides
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, you can have a job that you can have enough salary for your family despite
of
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the high cost
for
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of
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 accommodation and food. In conclusion, I am of my view to say that you should go to the
cities
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 for living because they offer you modern facilities to work and study
as well as
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 more chances to have a good life.
Nevertheless
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, when you are old and you need a
peace
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peaceful
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 and quiet place, I advise you to move to rural
areas
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 to live.

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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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