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Some people think cities are the best place to live. others prefer to live in the countryside. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Some
people
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 think that it is
the
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most appropriate to live in the
cities
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.
However
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, there are still
people
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argue
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who argue
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 that
countryside
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the countryside
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 is
a
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the
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 best place to live.
Therefore
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, I will introduce my opinion about both views. On the one hand,
cities
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 are the best place for studying and working. Indeed, there are a large number of big companies for applying
a
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for a
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good job or schools with high education that help you improve a lot in your study in the
cities
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.
Furthermore
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, the food in urban
areas
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 is
also
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 delicious and diverse
as well as
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people
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 can
also
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 enjoy many entertaining activities
such
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 as playing in theme parks, going to cinemas and so on.
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, it is a good idea to live in the
cities
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, especially
youngsters
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for youngsters
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.
On the other hand
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, living in the
cities
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also
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 has
their
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its
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 drawbacks like that there are so many traffic accidents in urban
areas
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. It is actually true
due to
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 the fact that there are more vehicles in the
cities
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 than that in the countryside.
Moreover
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, there is so much noise
and
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in metropolitan
areas
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 so it is not a good idea for the old to live.
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,
people
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 who are old are not suitable to live in the
cities
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.
Although
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 living in the
cities
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 has its drawbacks, it has so many benefits for many
people
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 to settle down. To exemplify, it offers
people
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, especially young
people
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, more opportunities to develop themselves and more choices for entertainment.
Besides
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, you can have a job that you can have enough salary for your family despite
of
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the high cost
for
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of
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 accommodation and food. In conclusion, I am of my view to say that you should go to the
cities
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 for living because they offer you modern facilities to work and study
as well as
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 more chances to have a good life.
Nevertheless
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, when you are old and you need a
peace
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peaceful
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 and quiet place, I advise you to move to rural
areas
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 to live.
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