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Some people think cities are the best place to live. Other prefer to live in the countryside. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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With the rising population of the world, there is a discussion about where is the best place to build a home, in the urban or the rural areas. Though both
the
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sentiments are justifications,
this
 essay supports the second statement more than the first with the below reason. With the development of technology, living on the outskirts is more and more comfortable. It
also
 should be noted that housing is more affordable than urban and the opportunity for work is increasing too. Nowadays,
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investors are focused on under-development areas, so it can be said that the countryside may have a lot of careers that are even more worthwhile than
cities
. The urban area provides a variety of conveniences, benefits and facilities to ensure the life of its inhabitants. But, with the thought of the chance to cross a better career or work in
cities
 is better than in the countryside leading to lots of people moving into it, making the places more and more crowded. So the conveniences that these places provide will never catch up with the demand. So the cost of living will increase on and on, causing more inflation. The writer's statement prefers the countryside because it benefits. With the small numbers of factories and traffic the air in the rural areas is way better than in the
cities
, so the health problems will decline a significant amount. The expenditure for living
also
 decreases
due to
 the lack of big business. In conclusion, living in
cities
 is more worthwhile than settling in
cities
according to
 the involvement of the future.

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