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Some people think cities are the best place to live. Others prefer to live in the countryside. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

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Some public think living in urban is the best place to live but other public have different think that living in rural is better. The writer will talk about two problems and talk about my own opinion. The first is living in an urban. When a
community
 live there will have many advantages. For ,example
community
 can have a good environment
to
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 the
subject
in
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and give us a qualification which has
community
 find a good
job
 with a high salary but when a
community
job
 in an urban,
job
hour
 or
subject
hour
 will be more than in
rural
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 so they can feel exhausted after
job
 or
subject
. Turning to the landscape of urban, in the evening, a
community
 who
live
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 in urban can see beautiful landscapes with many different colours of light in all skyscrapers which is a relaxing
hour
 for families living there. The second is living in rural. Different from urban, rural have few good schools to
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 in and can not find good jobs with high salaries but a
job
 or
subject
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there need not
job
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a job
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 or
subject
 more
hour
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 because maybe some families in rural did not have much money
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subject
. When
community
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a community
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 in rural have that problem, they will take a son to
job
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 on the farm like looking after a bull.
Besides
 that rural usually have fresh air and many
hour
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rural are relaxing
hour
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 for
community
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 in there. In conclusion, two problems have advantages and disadvantages but if you want to have fresh air, they will live in rural but if they want to have a good
job
, they will live in urban. In my opinion, I prefer living in rural than urban because live in there I do not have illness or sickness.

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