You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic. The use of mobile phone is as antisocial as smoking. Smoking is banned in certain places so mobile phone should be banned like smoking. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.

It is a common thing that mobile
phone
used
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use
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and smoking are becoming
debateable
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debatable
issues in our society since there are some beneficial and negative effects for it.
However
, In my opinion, I don't stand for the idea that
phone
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phones
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should take the same case as smoking. If we are
loking
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looking
for the
advanteges
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advantages
of
mobile
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a mobile
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phone
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phones
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, it takes an essential part
for
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of
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our daily needs unlikely the
ciggarate
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cigarette
that having no positive impact
for
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on
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our life.
Moreover
,
phone
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the phone
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is now
being
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the best
electronical
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electronic
tool for communication and socialization in which if it is being banned to
used
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use
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in some places
then
it will make some difficulties even problems
to
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for
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people who are regularly using
phone
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phones
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everytime
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every time
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for
accepted
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acceptable
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purposes.
Additionally
, there is no crucial reason why
phone
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phones
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should be prohibited
to
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from
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being used anywhere even in the school area. The kids
nowdays
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nowadays
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are very familiar with the application and its easy learning sources.
In contrast
with
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apply
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smoking that having lots of negative issues not only for
ourself
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ourselves
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but
also
for others. It is common that smoking
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caused
coused
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causes
health
problem
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problems
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that may
accured
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occur
such
as sore throat and cancer and for
cocial
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social
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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