The supplied bar chart above represents the data about people living in rural, urban and town who born in Australia or outside of state between 1995 and 2010.
The bar chart shown represents the statistics of citizens living in three areas, namely rural,urban and town for those born in or out of Australia by 15 years apart.
Overall
, we can see that more people
are living in cities compared to towns which are decreasing in number.
In detail, majority
of Correct article usage
the majority
Australian
Correct your spelling
Australians
stays
in the cities between the year 1995 to 2010. The number increases from approximately 50 to around 65 Wrong verb form
stayed
people
. In contrast
, those living in rural areas decreases from the year 1995 to the later year by 12 people
(from around 30 to about 18 people
).
For those born outside of Australia, they too mostly live in the cities. The number plummet from 60 to 80 people
in 15 years. However
, the same goes to
rural areas, Change preposition
for
which
the amount of Correct word choice
where
people
living there is decreasing drastically from 40 to as low as around 5 people
from 1995 to 2010. People
living in towns also
decreases from around 12 people
to about 10 people
.Submitted by aininsofia2004 on
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