The supplied bar chart above represents the data about people living in rural, urban and town who born in Australia or outside of state between 1995 and 2010.

The supplied bar chart above represents the data about people living in rural, urban and town who born in Australia or outside of state between 1995 and 2010.
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The bar chart shown represents the statistics of citizens living in three areas, namely rural,urban and town for those born in or out of Australia by 15 years apart.
Overall
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, we can see that more
people
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are living in cities compared to towns which are decreasing in number. In detail,
majority
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the majority
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of
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Australians
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stays
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in the cities between the year 1995 to 2010. The number increases from approximately 50 to around 65
people
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.
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, those living in rural areas decreases from the year 1995 to the later year by 12
people
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(from around 30 to about 18
people
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). For those born outside of Australia, they too mostly live in the cities. The number plummet from 60 to 80
people
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in 15 years.
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, the same goes
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for
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rural areas,
which
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where
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the amount of
people
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living there is decreasing drastically from 40 to as low as around 5
people
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from 1995 to 2010.
People
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living in towns
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decreases from around 12
people
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to about 10
people
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.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words people with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "represents" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "decreases" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Demographics
  • Migration patterns
  • Population distribution
  • Rural
  • Urban
  • Town
  • Native-born
  • Foreign-born
  • Growth rate
  • Settlement patterns
  • Residential categories
  • Urbanization
  • Infrastructure
  • Economic opportunities
  • Lifestyle preferences
  • Residential mobility
  • Urban planning
  • Governmental policies
  • Community impact
  • Data analysis
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