The table below shows statistics about the top five countries for international tourism in 2012 and 2013.

The table below shows statistics about the top five countries for international tourism in

2012 and 2013.
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The given table depicts the number of
tourists
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and the
spendings
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spending
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in 5 countries in 2012 and 2013.
Overall
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, France got the highest amount of
tourists
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but the USA got the highest profit. Italy
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, in contrast,
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in contrast
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got both the lowest number of travellers and spending. In 2012, France attracted 83
million
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tourists
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and
then
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increased by nearly 2
million
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by the next
year
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. Spain had the number of
tourists
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increased the most with more than 3
million
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compared to a
year
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prior. China was the only country which had fewer
tourists
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than in the previous
year
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. Italy got the least amount of travellers with 46.4
million
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in 2012,
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climbed to 47.7
million
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in 2013. Despite attracting the most
tourists
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in both years, France only got about 53
billion
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dollars in 2012,
then
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increased by 2.5
billion
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.
USA
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The USA
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was the country with the highest
spendings
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spending
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of 126
billion
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dollars,
also
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with the biggest difference
with
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of
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over 13
billion
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dollars. Spain
also
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got more spending of 4
billion
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compared to a
year
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before. China despite a drop in the amount of
tourists
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but surprisingly had an upward trend in revenue. Italy continued to
had
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the lowest income in both of the years.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
Vocabulary: Replace the words tourists, million, year, billion with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • tourist arrivals
  • influx of tourists
  • economic impact
  • job creation
  • infrastructure development
  • revenue generation
  • geographical distribution
  • popular destination
  • regional analysis
  • natural attractions
  • cultural heritage
  • seasonal trends
  • tourism patterns
  • climatic conditions
  • tourism preferences
  • adventure tourism
  • eco-tourism
  • cultural tourism
  • holiday seasons
  • local events
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