The table below shows statistics about the top five countries for international tourism in 2012 and 2013.

The table below shows statistics about the top five countries for international tourism in

2012 and 2013.
The given table depicts the number of
tourists
and the
spendings
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spending
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in 5 countries in 2012 and 2013.
Overall
, France got the highest amount of
tourists
but the USA got the highest profit. Italy
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in contrast
got both the lowest number of travellers and spending. In 2012, France attracted 83
million
tourists
and
then
increased by nearly 2
million
by the next
year
. Spain had the number of
tourists
increased the most with more than 3
million
compared to a
year
prior. China was the only country which had fewer
tourists
than in the previous
year
. Italy got the least amount of travellers with 46.4
million
in 2012,
then
climbed to 47.7
million
in 2013. Despite attracting the most
tourists
in both years, France only got about 53
billion
dollars in 2012,
then
increased by 2.5
billion
.
USA
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The USA
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was the country with the highest
spendings
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spending
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of 126
billion
dollars,
also
with the biggest difference
with
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of
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over 13
billion
dollars. Spain
also
got more spending of 4
billion
compared to a
year
before. China despite a drop in the amount of
tourists
but surprisingly had an upward trend in revenue. Italy continued to
had
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the lowest income in both of the years.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
Vocabulary: Replace the words tourists, million, year, billion with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.

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  • tourist arrivals
  • influx of tourists
  • economic impact
  • job creation
  • infrastructure development
  • revenue generation
  • geographical distribution
  • popular destination
  • regional analysis
  • natural attractions
  • cultural heritage
  • seasonal trends
  • tourism patterns
  • climatic conditions
  • tourism preferences
  • adventure tourism
  • eco-tourism
  • cultural tourism
  • holiday seasons
  • local events
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