The best way to teach children to cooperate is through team sports at school. To what extent do you agree or disagree? You should write at least 254 words.

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doing group
sport
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activies
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activities
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for
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youngsters
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each other. I fondly agree
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notion because
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applied easily and the rest of the issues will be elaborated
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following paragraph. On the one hand, children nowadays are encouraged to have active life through some activities
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as joining
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to playing games together. The main aim is to educate them to be able to socialize,
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,
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and lean on each other as a
team
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,
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a student
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student
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students
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who
join
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basketball
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team
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teams
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tend to have many
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and when they are in trouble it
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for them to ask for help.
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get
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in school activities
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an effective way to educate children to
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learn
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around
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themselves as a community.
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benefits could find in
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way they learn how to communicate
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each other, especially when they have a chance to be a leader. With
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capacity, they could act as a captain lead the
team
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, set the goal,
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a solution for a problem.
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, they
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abruptly
mastering
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leadership
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in
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early
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age which
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this
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could be an informal education that they learn directly
while
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doing the sport.
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,
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asking
the children to
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part
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some group activities bring myriad of benefits inevitably
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as
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more tactical
between
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each other and
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having
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an early experience to become a leader in a
team
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,
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also
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bring
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huge
advatages
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advantages
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in health.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cooperation
  • teamwork
  • communication
  • values
  • applied
  • aspects
  • belonging
  • camaraderie
  • participating
  • essential
  • social skills
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