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Some people think visiting museums is the best way for children to learn history, while many others believe there are better ways. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Some people feel that visiting
museums
 is the best way for
children
 to learn
history
,
whereas
 others suppose there are other better
ways
. Personally, I reckon that visiting
museums
 can be beneficial for
children
 to start liking and studying
history
,
however
, there are better
ways
. on the one hand,
museums
 can give
children
 the opportunity to be curious about
history
,
for instance
, one of my friends when he was a child did not use to like
history
, he even used to loathe it,
therefore
, his parents decided to take him to the museum, and he became curious he asked many questions about different topics and he started to like
history
, and he studied
history
 pretty well,
consequently
museums
 can have a huge impact on
children
on the other hand
, there is no denying fact that there are better
ways
 for
children
 to study
history
,
for example
, nowadays the number of videos on youtube is increasing which means
children
 are able to find numerous videos related to
history
 on the internet and watch them, what is more, they can read historical books which will help
children
 to identify which country's
history
 they adore most or which era. My uncle purchased his son a historical book when his
children
 were only 12 after he read that book he has been obsessed with everything related to
history
, he likes documentaries related to
history
, he is passionate about historical books, and currently,
history
 is his favourite subject at school. in conclusion, visiting
museums
 has some positive impacts to lead
children
 to study
history
,
however
, there are better
ways
 to pursue
children
 to learn
history
.
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