Some species of animals are almost extinct; and many others seem to be fast approaching a similar risk. What are the reasons for this? What should be done to solve this problem? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience.

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It is indisputable that some species of animals are extinct,
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to be reduced dramatically during
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four decades. In
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terms of causes, it has been found that one of the paramount reasons that lead to an obvious decline in different species is hunting practices by hunters.
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, hunting is one of the ancient practices that people used to do for various purposes,
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as a source of food, creating fashionable designs from
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skin or sports activities.
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, some creatures need
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environment
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for growth and reproduction.
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, nowadays many
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houses were destroyed or replaced with
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merely as parks, business buildings or even residential areas. On the other end of the scale, there are a bunch of proposed solutions to control
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problem, since it may
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detrimental
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impact on our
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in the biodiversity system.
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, governments should step up and take prompt action, including
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killing in all ways or purposes.
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, research institutions and animal right activist should cooperate and dedicate their efforts and money in order to provide a healthy and sustainable
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where rare animals can live
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and breed. In conclusion, some creatures are threatened
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extinction because of some human activities.
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, it is extremely essential that governments ensure steps are taken to prevent
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phenomenon from deteriorating
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • species extinction
  • endangered animals
  • biodiversity
  • habitat loss
  • deforestation
  • urbanization
  • poaching
  • illegal wildlife trade
  • climate change
  • pollution
  • conservation efforts
  • legislation
  • enforcement
  • human overpopulation
  • sustainable development
  • responsible consumption
  • education
  • awareness programs
  • protected areas
  • wildlife reserves
  • international cooperation
  • collaboration
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