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You recently organised an all-day meeting for your company, which took place in a local hotel. In their feedback, participants at the meeting said that they liked the hotel, but they were unhappy about the food that was served for lunch. Write a letter to the manager of the hotel. In your letter, -say what the participants liked about the hotel -explain why they were unhappy about the food -suggest what the manager should do to improve the food in future 매

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Dear Sir, I am a staff
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 a company that held a meeting in your hotel
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 week. I am writing to express my thanks and
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 to share some feedback. The participants were very pleased with the venue. The meeting room was spacious, clean, and comfortable. Your staff were friendly, polite, and helpful throughout the day. The hotel was in a good location and easy to find.
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, many guests were disappointed with the lunch. The food was cold and lacked variety. There were not enough options for vegetarian guests. The quality of the meal did not match our expectations. I would suggest offering fresher, hotter food in future. It would
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 help to provide a wider range of dishes. Please ask the organisers about special food needs before the event. I hope you will consider these suggestions for future meetings. I look forward to hearing from you Yours faithfully, Rahul

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task response
Task response: Add one more clear detail about why the lunch was bad, like small amount or bad taste.
task response
Task response: Use a more formal line at the end, such as 'I look forward to hearing from you soon.'
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Link ideas with one or two more words like 'also' or 'because' to make the flow smoother.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: In the first line, say 'I am a staff member' or 'I work for a company' for better clarity.
task response
Task response: You answered all parts of the task in a clear way.
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Task response: Your tone is polite and mostly formal.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: The letter has a clear start, middle, and end.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Each paragraph has one main idea, so it is easy to follow.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • I am writing to express my thanks and also to share some feedback.
  • The participants were very pleased with the venue.
  • The meeting room was spacious, clean, and comfortable.
  • Your staff were friendly, polite, and helpful throughout the day.
  • The hotel was in a good location and easy to find.
  • However, many guests were disappointed with the lunch.
  • The food was cold and lacked variety.
  • There were not enough options for vegetarian guests.
  • The quality of the meal did not match our expectations.
  • I would suggest offering fresher, hotter food in future.
  • It would also help to provide a wider range of dishes.
  • Please ask organisers about special food needs before the event.
  • I hope you will consider these suggestions for future meetings.
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