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Write about the following topic. Music play an important role in society, others think it is simply a form of entertainment for individuals. Discuss both views and give your opinion Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 254 words.

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, some
people
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 look downside of
music
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, thinking that it is just a way to pass our time, others
instead
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, see through the
music
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 itself, and understand the meaning that it had throughout our lives. In my opinion,
music
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 can be an important tool not only for understanding ourselves but
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 for the
people
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 around us. There are a lot of
people
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, that do not see the greater impact that
music
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 had on our lives. They argue that
music
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 has no meaning because they think that its only aim is to entertain others since they compare
music
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 to viewing some programmes on TV.
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, for them, it makes no sense, it is just a sound in the background of everyone's lives, you can listen to it or not and it will not change anything. Others
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, believe in the power of
music
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.
Music
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 can change
society
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 because it spreads important messages, it can be about different types of social problems, that we have in our
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,
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 as bullying or diets etc.. . It is through
music
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 that we fight important social and political battles.
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, during the protests held in Spain for the violence against women,
people
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 sang a song about the violence that was (is, I would add) happening.
Music
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 makes you understand that you are not alone, that you are not the only one who feels in a certain way, it unites
people
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 from all around the world.
Music
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 brings sparkles when there is only dark around you. Provided all these reasons, I agree with those who said that it plays an important role in
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 because it changes not only us, as a singular individual, but it shapes everyone, and
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 the
society
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 itself. In conclusion,
while
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 some
people
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 think of
music
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 as something only to entertain
people
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, I do agree with the other part of the argument, saying that
music
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 has,
instead
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, an important role in shaping
society
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.
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