The diagram below shows how cheese is made. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram displays the making of
cheese
.
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Overall
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this
is a process that involves nine steps: acidification, solidification, cutting, heating and draining, adding of salt, shaping, fermentation, packing, and Linking Words
finally
selling.
First of all, there is acidification, which consists in mixing rax milk with bacteria to create enzymes. Linking Words
The next
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step
is solidification, during which the enzyme is solidified and turns into curds. Use synonyms
Then
, these curds are cut into small pieces, because Linking Words
after
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this
all these pieces are poured into a pot, where they are first heated and Linking Words
then
drained.
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As a consequence
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this
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step
, the previous curd pieces are turned into liquid, which is put in a basin, where is added a bit of salt, to make the Use synonyms
cheese
more flavourful. The sixth Use synonyms
step
, is one of the most importantUse synonyms
,
because it gives the Remove the comma
apply
cheese
, the shape that we all know, and all of Use synonyms
this
is possible through a machine that shapes Linking Words
this
liquid into chees using a special stencil. Linking Words
After
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this
, the Linking Words
cheese
is fermented, and Use synonyms
this
is the longest Linking Words
step
, it takes almost two months. As the Use synonyms
cheese
is fermented enough, it can be packed, and Use synonyms
then
, Linking Words
finally
, is ready to be brought to a shop, where it will be sold.Linking Words
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words cheese, step with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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