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The bar chart provides information about how families in a country spent weekly income in both 1968 and in 2018

The bar chart provides information about how families in a country spent weekly income in both 1968 and in 2018
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The given bar graph shows information about families' expenditure in a given country from their weekly wages between the period 1968 and 2018.
Overall
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, the most important factor emitting from the graph indicates that more money was spent on food in 1968
whereas
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 the highest was on leisure in 2018. Families spent the same amount on household goods.
To begin
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 with, in 1968 the highest consumption was of food which is about 35% of their weekly allowance followed by housing and clothing and footwear about 10 %respectively,
moreover
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,less income was used for fuel and power and personal goods.
However
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, approximately 18% was spent on food, with leisure being the most expensive activity which was about 23%. the clan did not use much capital from their weekly income.
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, both families spent the same amount
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on household goods.
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