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The most important aim of science should be to improve people’s lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#aim #science #people’s #lives
In
this
 modern era, with the
development
 of
science
 individual’s
life
 has become easily accessible. I agree with the statement that
science
 plays a vital role in enhancing the quality of human
life
.
To begin
 with, in any nation,
science
had
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 many advents related to improvement in the medical field.
Moreover
, the mortality rate
had
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 plunged down in comparison to the past with the help of medicines and scientists in
development
 technology to identify cures
in
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for health diseases.
For example
, In India,
Corona virus
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Coronavirus
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 Coronavirus was widespread and there were no
anti-biotics
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antibiotics
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 to use and combat the virus which resulted
with
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in numerous numbers of death rate and many of them were infected
of
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with it,
while
 no awareness
for
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 precautions
were
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was
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taken. With the
development
 of scientific medicines and injections related to Covid-19 were issued which helped to save
the
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people’s
life
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,
whereas
, now individuals can freely move out of their houses without masks.
On the other hand
, if the scientist’s scientists have stopped doing research,
than
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 many problems will arise in
human’s
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life
.
Additionally
, Fore-casting Forecasting weather is a crucial part for every citizen. If the forecast will not be done, people will not able to take safety measures in advance. to overcome the. In
absence
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 of
such
 inventions,
the
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unfortunate circumstances
such
 as drought, flood or cyclone may become
life threatening
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; as people are not prepared
so
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they may lose their homes and
agricultures
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agriculture
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. which would be very dangerous,
leads
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 to drought, many
will loose
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lose their homes and agriculture would
also
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be damaged.
For example
, nowadays with the help of scientific
development
 in projecting weather, it benefits the farmers to protect their soil
as
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from the changing weather conditions. In conclusion,
science
 indeed is a foremost part
to expand
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 people’s lives in a better way and various positive impacts are being seen and were assumed for more discoveries in the future.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • crucial role
  • enhancing
  • quality of human life
  • advancements
  • medicine
  • healthcare
  • scientific research
  • solving societal problems
  • improving living standards
  • global issues
  • climate change
  • food scarcity
  • technological advancements
  • limitations
  • negative consequences
  • ethical considerations
  • sustainability
  • environmental preservation
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