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The diagram below shows the process for recycling plastic bottles. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and makecomparisonswhererelevant.

The diagram below shows the process for recycling plastic bottles. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and makecomparisonswhererelevant.
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The given diagram represents the way
plastic
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bottles
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 are sorted, reformed, and produced for other goods.
Overall
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, the process involves 9 steps, starting with recycling by people and ending up with converting to end products. First of all, after people threw away
plastic
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bottles
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, trucks gather and carry them to a recycling centre. Workers in the centre sort the
bottles
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 which are on a moving container. These sorted
bottles
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 become blocks that are compressed by a pressing machine.
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toothed wheels crush these compressed blocks and break them into small
plastic
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 pieces. After washing the pieces, they are passed to the machine which converts crushed plastics to
plastic
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 pellets. Throughout the machine,
plastic
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 pellets are heated and become a raw material.
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 step is followed by making a raw material, which is formed into a fixed shape and stocked by turns.
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, by using raw materials, various goods are produced and sold to people.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words plastic, bottles with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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