The pie chart shows the factors that negatively affect the development of agricultural land around the world,while the table illustrates the process of land degradation in the three main regions of these factors.

The pie chart shows the factors that negatively affect the development of agricultural land around the world,while the 

table illustrates the process of land degradation in the three main regions of these factors.
The pie chart shows the factors that negatively affect the development of agricultural
land
around the world,
while
the table illustrates the process of
land
degradation in the three main regions of these factors.
Overall
,over-grazing,deforestation and over-cultivation are the main significant causes of agricultural
land
degradation around the world.Europe has a much higher level of degraded
land
than Oceania and North America. Over-grazing accounts for 35% of degraded
land
in the world,it is the biggest cause of large-scale
land
degradation.
While
deforestation and over-cultivation account for 30% and 28% and other
degradations
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for 7%. Of all these three regions,Europe had the largest share of degraded
land
in the 1990s,accounting for 23%.
However
,the biggest factor was not over-grazing but deforestation
as a result
of which the indicators showed 9.8% of the
land
became less nasty.Oceania was
the
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second after Europe for a total of 13% of it"s degraded
land
and
this
was caused by over-grazing of 11.3%.
For
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comparison,a total of 5% of the
land
in North America was degraded and over-cultivation responsible for 3.3% was the biggest cause.
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