Rich country often gives money to poorer countries, but it does not solve poverty. Therefore developed country should give other types of help to the poorer countries rather than financial aid. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

Affluent counties frequently donate financial aid to underprivileged regions,

however

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these efforts are futile.

Consequently

, there should be other kinds of

asassistance

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assistance

as assistance

rather than monetary help. I completely agree with

this

view as given

money

is wasted inappropriately and should be given in other forms. First and foremost, the

money

given to poor countries does not help to eradicate poverty and famine because of

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financial mismanagement of

this

donation.

That is

to say, rulers in unwealthy areas take the

money

and waste them improperly. Afghanistan is a prime example,

instead

of spending

money

on developing the country they spent them on terrorism.

Thus

, it

does

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not only deprive the country of

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, but

also

it

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makes its situation deteriorate.

In addition

to that, a lump sum of

money

should be given to improving projects to develop the country in all aspects.

In other words

, it is much better to carry out projects

such

as building well-organized infrastructure, and establishing modern hospitals, and educational centres.

Consequently

,

this

will avert lamentable wastage of

money

as well as

guarantee setting up the millstone for more advanced amenities.

To conclude

, philanthropy assistance is better geared towards sustaining society's basic needs.

That is

proven to avail the community with the necessary requirements.